Ah, Forbidden Love

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I am honored to introduce Crystal Collier, author of MOONLESS. This debut novel is far more than just a drool-worthy cover. Talk about weaving a rich tapestry of interesting characters, supernatural charm and gorgeous world building. The best part is this is just part of a series which is sure to win your attention. 

Here is the blurb:

Alexia’s nightmares become reality: a dead baron, red-eyed wraiths, and forbidden love with a man hunted by these creatures. After an attack close to home, Alexia realizes she cannot keep one foot in her old life and one in this new world. To protect her family she must either be sold into a loveless marriage, or escape with her beloved and risk becoming one of the Soulless.

MOONLESS is Jane Eyre meets Supernatural.

Congratulations, Crystal! This is a great read, and I can’t wait for the rest of the Maiden of Time series. Now for some writerly advice from Crystal!


I love the English language. Don’t you? There’s a hundred ways to say the exact same thing—which is what makes every writer’s voice so unique. But often I find myself pulled out of the story by…

telling.

So often we hear about “telling” vs “showing”. If you get into deep POV (Point of View), you immerse the reader so thoroughly, they forget they’re reading. Instead, they’re experiencing.

Let’s look at an example.

Sample (bad): First Marty picked up the mirror, then stepped out onto the back porch. Finally, he lifted it toward the sun…

Biggest problem: Sequence words. Why not just use bullet points, eh?

Sample (better): Marty picked up the mirror. He stepped onto the back porch and lifted it toward the sun.

Analysis: Right to the action. This is stronger, but it’s stale. I’m not in his head. I don’t know what he’s thinking or feeling.

Ready to go immersive? If you truly want to suck your readers into the moment, help them FEEL it through the five senses. Isolate the emotion you want the reader to experience.

Example (awesome): Marty’s fingers slipped around the cool, plastic hand mirror. His grip tightened as he shoved through the swinging door. Fractured light danced off the reflective surface, coating the splintered porch in puddles of light. He heaved a breath and lifted it toward the sun.

Suddenly we have a hint he’s got some trepidation. We experience the lack of heat in the mirror, the tension in his movement, the contradiction of rough, unfinished timbers to smooth puddles of light. Reading that paragraph, I want to know more. Do you? Why is he anxious and what’s going to happen next?

Alright, writerly friends, what words of wisdom can you add?


crystalAuthor Bio: Crystal, author of MOONLESS, is a former composer/writer for Black Diamond Productions. She can be found practicing her brother-induced ninja skills while teaching children or madly typing about fantastic and impossible creatures. She has lived from coast to coast and now calls Florida home with her creative husband, three littles, and “friend” (a.k.a. the zombie locked in her closet). Secretly, she dreams of world domination and a bottomless supply of cheese.

Where to find Crystal: Blog | Twitter | Goodreads | Facebook | Website

How to reward Crystal for years of work and improve your writer karma: Buy Moonless

 


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